My bedroom

Hello,boys and girls.Do you have your own bedroom?Is your bedroom nice and clean?Zou Yingrui has a beautiful bedroom.Let’s go and see.

My bedroom

I have a nice bedroom.Come and have a look with me,please.

Let’s open the door now.Look,there’s a desk near the door, and there’s a computer, a lamp, and some books on it.I often read books and do my homework at the desk.After finishing my homework,I can surf the Internet on the computer.Beside the desk,there’s a yellow bed,and there’s a toy rabbit on it.It’s a birthday present from my father.I like to play with it.We sleep together every night.Look at the photo on the wall!Who’s the lovely girl with long hair and big eyes?Oh, it’s me. I took this photo in Suzhou last spring.There are some flowers on the window.I water them every day.Look,some butterflies are flying in the flowers.How beautiful they are!I always make my bedroom clean and tidy.

This is my bedroom.Do you like it?

教师点评：小作者通过卧室里的物品及自己平时在卧室内的活动详细描述了自己的卧室，向我们展示了一个漂亮、洁净的卧室，同时把卧室小主人的可爱也凸显了出来。全文行文流畅，没有明显的语法错误，是一篇值得学习的佳作。Come on!